The following is an update on my revision plans for my Twitterive, which is a multi-gemre, multi-modal narrative that I created for Writing Research and Technology, taught by Sabatino Mangini at Rowan University.
After presenting my Twitterive, I have several ideas of how to improve it. I had an issue with the use of latitude and longitude as my repetend because the links weren't working how I wanted them to, but thanks to my classmates' suggestion, I have decided that I will keep this as my repetend and make it more clear by adding screen shots of the actual locations. I am also considering adding a map at the end which shows the entire journey to make my place even more clear to readers.
I plan to rewrite "The Letter I Wrote", since it was pointed out that while the rest of my Twitterive points to one time period, this letter goes into the general issue and is less focused on this time period. I will revise the letter to make it more specific to the issue I'm addressing. I will be sure to mention why I need my mother right now and why it is bothering me enough to write a letter, which is something I have never done before.
I have decided that I will add some comic strip conversations. These conversations will be the ones I wish I could have or what I wish my mother would say and do when I come to her with these issues. I feel that by making it a comic strip, I will make it clearer to my readers that it did not actually happen.
I am considering removing the tweets that are in the body of my Twitterive, since I am not sure why I put them there and others did not think that it adds to the Twitterive, and I agree.
Even though I expressed fear at my mother's reaction, I am considering adding a video of some sort to give another illustration of what it is like to try and talk with my mother. This is the part that I am the least sure about, and I will only do it if I can think of a way to not show her face.
Finally, I was alerted to a formatting issue with "Friday", since it blends with the text around it and does not stand out clearly. I will change all of the days of the weeks to make them stand out more and to make sure that they are all uniform.
I appreciate all of the feedback I received. I was able to use all of the suggestions I was given in some way. I am looking forward to the end product and seeing what my classmates think of the changes they helped come up with.
After presenting my Twitterive, I have several ideas of how to improve it. I had an issue with the use of latitude and longitude as my repetend because the links weren't working how I wanted them to, but thanks to my classmates' suggestion, I have decided that I will keep this as my repetend and make it more clear by adding screen shots of the actual locations. I am also considering adding a map at the end which shows the entire journey to make my place even more clear to readers.
I plan to rewrite "The Letter I Wrote", since it was pointed out that while the rest of my Twitterive points to one time period, this letter goes into the general issue and is less focused on this time period. I will revise the letter to make it more specific to the issue I'm addressing. I will be sure to mention why I need my mother right now and why it is bothering me enough to write a letter, which is something I have never done before.
I have decided that I will add some comic strip conversations. These conversations will be the ones I wish I could have or what I wish my mother would say and do when I come to her with these issues. I feel that by making it a comic strip, I will make it clearer to my readers that it did not actually happen.
I am considering removing the tweets that are in the body of my Twitterive, since I am not sure why I put them there and others did not think that it adds to the Twitterive, and I agree.
Even though I expressed fear at my mother's reaction, I am considering adding a video of some sort to give another illustration of what it is like to try and talk with my mother. This is the part that I am the least sure about, and I will only do it if I can think of a way to not show her face.
Finally, I was alerted to a formatting issue with "Friday", since it blends with the text around it and does not stand out clearly. I will change all of the days of the weeks to make them stand out more and to make sure that they are all uniform.
I appreciate all of the feedback I received. I was able to use all of the suggestions I was given in some way. I am looking forward to the end product and seeing what my classmates think of the changes they helped come up with.
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